THE GOOD ......
AMY BUCKSHEATH
14, Wychurch Road, Canterbury, Kent. CT2 7SJ.
Tel. 01227 - 764521 email ab999@kent.ac.uk
Profile
An adaptable and responsible graduate seeking an entry-level position in public relations which will utilise the organisational and communication skills developed through my involvement with Kent Rag and promotional work during vacations.
During my degree I successfully combined my studies with work and other commitments showing myself to be self-motivated, organised and capable of working under pressure. I have a clear, logical mind with a practical approach to problem solving and a drive to see things through to completion. I enjoy working on my own initiative or in a team. In short, I am reliable, trustworthy, hardworking and eager to learn and have a genuine interest in PR.
Education ........ (CV continues here)
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The Profile normally starts straight after the personal details on the CV (these will be missed out in all the other examples to save space. See our CV examples to see how the profile fits in with the rest of the CV.)
Clear career aim and evidence of some involvement in PR related activities whilst at university. This is informative, factual and focused on the job in question and gives information that encourages the reader to delve further into the CV.
"Successfully combined my studies with work and other commitments". Public Relations is largely about juggling lots of different tasks successfully, so this is an important piece of evidence that she will cope with the demands of the job
Summarises key attributes that make her suitable for PR jobs: initiative, drive, team-player, hardworking, meticulous, motivated.
Nice snappy ending to the profile
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THE AVERAGE ......
Personal Statement
I am an energetic and enthusiastic person who enjoys a challenge and achieving personal goals. My present career aim is to work within IT because I enjoy working with computers, I enjoy the environment and I find the work interesting and satisfying. The opportunity to learn new skills and work with new technologies is particularly attractive to me.
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This statement is very bland: too vague and makes broad general statements.
This is a good example of where it would bebetter to use no statement at all as it adds nothing to the CV. If you are not sure leave out the profile and use your covering letter to sell your skills instead.
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AND THE UGLY!
Personnel Statement
I am a dynamic individual with excellent teamworking and comunication skills.
I would like job in business.
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It should be Personal Statement NOTPersonnel!
CoMunication is spelt wrongly here - should be coMMunication.
Avoid hackneyed phrases such as "I have good communication skills and work well in ateam" They sound vague and vacuous, send selectors to sleep.
A very vague career aim.
Statements such as "I am a dynamic individual" can sound arrogant unless well written, and more importantly backed up with evidence later in the CV, otherwise they can sound just like hot air! Although see ourConfident Covering Letter to see how this strategy can be made to work effectively
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Profile
I am looking for management training which offers me the opportunity to develop new skills while strengthening those I already possess.
My degree in History has enabled me to develop good organisational skills, an analytical/logical approach to tasks and the ability to work under pressure. I am able to work well both on my own initiative and as part of a team.
My main strengths are adaptability, dependability and the determination to get a job done as proven by my varied work experiences in retail, catering, hospitality work, teaching and patient care. I try to learn something new from every experience because I believe there is always room for self-improvement both personally and professionally.
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Fairly broad career objective: she's trying to keep her options open here.
Sells the skills she has gained in her degree.
Summarises her main strengths and relates these to her work experience.
Nice last line about self improvement.Employers particularly like graduates who are up for new challenges.
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About Me
I have a visual impairment (full details are available on request), but this has not in any way prevented me from successfully completing a demanding degree course and further education qualifications. Far from being a disadvantage, this has increased my awareness of the needs of others and has increased my determination to succeed and to persevere when obstacles are placed in my path.
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This focuses on the applicant's disability, but rather than deterring the selector, it sells the skills she has gained from overcoming her disability ; awareness of the needs of others,determination and perseverance. It is short, to the point and effective.
Interesting title: About Me. This is a more informal title that might work well in the creative and media fields.
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Personal Statement
A graduate with strong communication and organisational skills gained in nursing, now seeking to move into a career as an analytical chemist. Whilst my degree is in forensic science a large majority of the course consisted of chemistry, as highlighted by the list of modules completed on my course shown below. I feel I have learned more than just the theory behind Forensics but also many fundamental skills for my career and life.
As I am a mature student I have other qualities to bring to the work place such as good team work, organisational skills, efficiency and I am very meticulous, I show pride in all the work I do, I work well under pressure and I love a challenge. I posses excellent verbal and written communication skills and am able to relate to a wide range of people. All these skills have been enhanced during all the work experiences I have gained over the years.
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Profile for a mature student.
Starts with her objective. Also sells her degree, even though it's in a slightly different field to that she is applying for, by listing relevant modules (not shown here of course: see thescience CV).
Sells the attributes she brings to the workplace as a mature graduate: pride in work, gets on well with a range of people.
Also says she has some of the key skills required by forensic scientists: meticulous, efficient, organised.
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Career Aspiration
To enter a graduate training programme in multimedia, preferably in the new-media sector where my creative initiative, ideas and a genuine enthusiasm would allow me to progress.
I have a good working knowledge of many industry leading software applications such as Adobe Dreamweaver, Photoshop and Autodesk Maya. I work to the highest standards and have an eye for detail with skills in design and organisation. Completing my course projects has taught me to provide originality and quality whilst successfully meeting deadlines.
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A clear, well written objective here can help to stand out from the crowd in the competitive area of the media or multimedia.
Gives brief evidence of technical skills. More details would be given later in the CV.
Evidence of core competencies needed in the work: originality, quality, attention to detail,organising, and deadline orientation.
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A versatile IT graduate, possessing strong motivational drive to succeed in the industry.
Highly developed skills in problem identification and implementation of effective solutions. Comfortable with analysing and understanding data, working under time pressure and presenting myself in a professional manner. Excellent inter-personal communication and social skills built through extensive training with the Samaritans. A friendly, mature and flexible individual with a proven entrepreneurial approach towards objectives and tasks.
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Here there is no heading to the profile. It's obvious that it is a profile by the content, and with CVs, the simpler it is, the better!
A very confident profile. Written without the use of personal pronouns (I have ....) to save space.
Second paragraph is rather dense and might be better broken up by the use of bullets or smaller paragraphs to make easier to read.
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Career Aim
A Business Administration graduate from the University of Kent. He has skills and knowledge essential for managing key areas of an organisation and the problem solving skills needed in finance. He is looking for a graduate trainee post in marketing where he can use his strong influencing skills.
Through his studies, work and voluntary roles he has acquired the ability to meet deadlines while maintaining a high standard of work. He possesses a good telephone manner and is able to relate to a wide range of people.
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Clear objective, although a bit confusing - mentions both finance and marketing!
Targeted at the skills required for the job :
- influencing
- telephone skills
- liaising,
- and deadline orientation.
This is written in the 3rd person (he rather than I) as if written by a referee. This seems to be a modern trend recommended by some recruitment agencies, but I'm not keen as it seems rather false and impersonal.
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Key Attributes
- Self motivated graduate with well developed project management and IT skills combined with a flexible attitude to work.
- A critical thinker with strong analytical skills
- Strong team-player skills developed through work in retail, in group laboratory experiments associated with the degree, and in particular group presentation work, in which good marks were achieved.
- Good organisational skills developed in a variety of deadline orientated situations.
- Get on well with people at all levels, easily making good working relationships.
- Have good presentation skills combining sound analytical research and clear verbal explanation.
- Seek out new responsibilities irrespective of reward and recognition.
- Strive for quality in everything I do.
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Uses "key attributes" instead of profile here.
A bulleted list here. Looks well organised and easy to see the key points, but a short paragraph of prose is warmer and more friendly. Action words are well used here.
Misses out the personal pronoun and verbhere (I am ....). This saves space and gives a cleaner look.
Project management skills are increasingly in demand so sell course projects and especially group projects.
Also evidence for other relevant skills: presenting, quality focus, people skills and team working.
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